Triolet Form

Triolet Form

I walk a fair amount at school.  My room is currently located up on the second floor on the far end next to the fire exit with its rickety stairwell. They recently re-welded this stairwell as our fire drills have proven rather more exciting than they ought to. My room, upstairs, next to the fire exit, is on the opposite side of the building from where our toilets are located.  Between each of our hour and a half classes, there is a ten-minute passing period or lunch.  My first concern is to wait and patiently-not-patiently ask my students to gather their things and go before the students of my next class get there so that I might lock the door behind me and keep them out of my knick knacks while I am away.  It’s not that they have sticky fingers, but some do have short term memory problems.  They forget that these things do not, in fact, belong to them.  

There are those students that I allow in the room, to serve as guardians of sorts. Even these I politely remind not to riot inside the classroom, but to take it outside first.  I am pretty sure they know I jest.  

From here, I proceed down the hallway to the stairwell.  It’s like an enclosed version of our fire escape.  I sink down into the mural of the ocean and feel a certain kinship with the grey whale that watches me with a sorrowful, wizened eye.  And I feel a little pep as the giant sea turtle waves to me from the door at the bottom of the stairs.  I turn sharply to the right and step out into our open area.  It is indeed an open area.  

Our school is a charter school and was a furniture warehouse at one point.  I have also been told that it used to be a Saturday market, which is why all the rooms are such a wide variety of size and shape.  But now, it is our school.  And, during the passing period, it is loud and vibrant and 150 students move in worlds of their own, full of story and drama and intrigue.  As I pass, I catch snippets of dialogue, giggles, shouts, tears, sighs, and more.  I get pulled in when I am spotted, and I engage as I continue on my journey to the trans-inclusive bathrooms shared by all.  Some days it is fun and uplifting: punch lines are thrown; puns are lobbied and returned; laughter is caught in the wind.  Some days are frustrating: heartaches are acknowledged;  boundaries are tested; referrals are needed.  

There is always a line by the time that I get there. This is a woman’s issue.  The hand dryers sound like jet engines and everyone laughs but no one talks, there is not much point over the din.  Then it is back the way I came nodding at co-workers; booking time for a chat or possibly a lunch thing; a shrug of the shoulders.  Then up through the ocean and I weave my way through waiting students; unlock the door; step back, and let them in.

I make this journey at least two times a day, but sometimes it is three to four depending on how my morning goes.  I have one of those watches which count your steps.  According to an email they sent me, the profession which walks the most out of surveyed Fitbit owners is, drum roll please, teachers.  I would imagine that the majority of those steps are quick, dash-like steps to the restroom, the printer, the office, and maybe the coffee pot.  Back and forth, always ending where you began, though there is a slight change of scenery with every new class.  Much like the Triolet form of poetry.  [I hope you see what I did there.]

The Triolet is an eight line poem with two repeating rhymes and two complete lines repeat at different times.  The rhyme scheme is ‘ABaAabAB.’  Like my to and fro walks, the lines may repeat and I may end where I began, but if you play with the form – the structure, punctuation, where the other lines are heading – the poem’s ending may vary ever so slightly from its beginning. It is an easier form for my students in the sense that they only have to come up with five different lines and still get an eight-line poem.   Of course, it is an interesting dance to watch.  Once they figure out the words that have the most rhyming partners, they can begin to play.  

My first attempt occurred before I picked up a copy of Lewis Putnam Turco’s Book of Forms. I had to make a second attempt after reading, for the first time, that triolets should have matching metric lines! You see, a person never stops learning. So my second attempt works to achieve the matching metric lines with the same poem. Now, to go inform my students.

Triolet – Attempt No. 1

I walk alone, sometimes at night.
I listen as the wind whispers to the trees;
it speaks of things which can’t be brought to light.
I walk – alone sometimes – at night.
I find it strange that I feel no fright.
It’s as if the darkness brings my soul some ease.
I walk alone sometimes at night.
I listen, as the wind whispers, to the trees.

Triolet – Attempt No. 2

I walk alone, sometimes at night.
Listen as wind whispers to trees
Speaking things which can’t come to light.
I walk – alone sometimes – at night
It’s strange that I can feel no fright
The darkness brings my soul some ease
I walk alone sometimes at night
Listen, as wind whispers to trees.

Your Turn!

Lines: 8
Rhyme: ABaAabAB [capital letters indicate a repeated line]
Rhythm: Equal Metric Lines

 

The Sonnet Form

The page represents you. This is what I tell my High School Sophomore English students. I tell them this when they ask me why we have to bother with grammar and writing and reading and school in general.  I tell them – the page represents you. And you will be judged by what scratches you leave upon it. In person, you may be an awesome, dynamic, witty, clever, quick-thinking being, but You will not accompany the email/tweet/resume/collection of poems/STAAR essay answer that you send out into the world.  Those who read your unaccompanied words may have never met you in person.  But, they will read these words and feel as though they know you or your “type” at least.  Some of these people will only be doing their jobs; others will just be doing what comes natural to all human beings: categorizing.

Humans categorize; they sort, they filter, they color code.  It’s how they function in the day to day without getting lost in information.  For example, let’s take a look at the job vacancy that just received 300 applications.  The job needs to be filled in a month – not a lot of time to filter.  No cover letter? – bin it! Not qualified yet? – bin it! No experience? – bin it!  Too much experience? – bin it! and on it goes. So, let’s say you make it to the pile of twenty on the table, just bear with me here. Your application sits on the table with 19 others for one position.  This is when they read the cover letters.  Tell me – do you think grammar matters now?

Okay, breathe. Let’s back it up a bit. William Shakespeare. Right so, not that far, but how about a look at his sonnets. He is perhaps the most well known of English writers, as to whether or not he is the greatest I will leave that up to countless other treatise. This is not that discussion.  Nonetheless, Shakespeare is considered canon material and we are introduced to him from pretty early on in our development.  Every year I have taught him, my students groan and moan and sigh very heavily.  The thought of not only having to write poetry, but also to have to write the way some guy who lived an ancient time ago dictated is absolutely abhorrent to them.  I say “yes, yes, it’s all very terrible and ghastly, but none the less, I expect 14 lines with ‘abab cdcd efef gg’ rhyme scheme written in iambic pentameter by the end of class.”

We don’t start with writing sonnets though; we start with reading them.  At first glance, all the students hear is the archaic sounding “shall I compare thee’s” and summer’s leases “hathing” etc.; and they, perhaps rightly, believe it “hath” nothing to do with them.  Of course, this is not true. For Shakespeare’s greatest gift is that his meaning to every generation is found in translation.  It is a wonderful moment when my students go from the lovely-dovey “Shall I compare thee to a Summer’s day/Thou art more lovely and more temperate” of his 18th Sonnet to his not so flattering 130 Sonnet – “And in some perfumes is there more delight/than in the breath that from my mistress reeks.”  They look at me kind of funny and say, “Wait. Is he saying her breath stinks?” Yes, yes this is exactly what he is saying.  As I watch them giggle and nudge each other, I am reminded of my first years of college when I discovered that Chaucer was dirty old man who liked to write “filth.”

I do not keep things from my students.  I tell them all the gossip, I mean, theories relating to Shakespeare.  Most of my students have experienced some form of trauma in their lives, I think they can handle the idea that Shakespeare might have been writing his love poems to a man.  There are great theories surrounding Shakespeare: he never existed, he was gay, he was a collection of writers at that time who chose to write under a single name, he was actually Queen Elizabeth writing incognito. Okay, the last one I made up.  However, there are always multiple theories in life, there is very little solid information out there, very few things we can know with certainty, and we’re not just talking about Shakespeare any more.  

I remember how I felt about writing when I was the same age as my students.  I found form poetry so restricting.  I felt it stifled the process and creativity.  My poetry was free, it flowed through me, it was inspiration, I was only the vessel, et cetera, et cetera. And this conviction was so righteous, that I don’t think I have tried my hand at sonnet writing again until my appalled Sophomore class, said “Well, aren’t you going to write one, if you think they are so great?”  I blustered and guffawed and then I relented.  Okay then, alright, I could do this.  I often give the same two options for theme, one is the traditional love sonnet – good love, unrequited love, love soars, love sucks, no matter – and then the alternative is to write a sonnet about how much it blows to have to write a sonnet. I choose an altered form of the second – how much my students hate writing sonnets.  Right so, first line – My students are always complaining – darn 4 and ½ iambs.  My young students are always complaining. ha! easy peasy… now what rhymes with complaining….  I wrote this piece a few years ago, and, alas, it is nowhere to be found.  I’d written it on the back of a piece of looseleaf paper, and it took me the rest of the class period.  My students and I worked together – mostly in silence, but every once in a while one of us would say what rhymes with this word? and would someone count my syllables?  I no longer have the poem, but it’s a great memory.  

Accept in its stead, this piece I wrote as a response to a prompt at my writer’s group.  We had just read the poem, “Men as Friends” by Robin Becker.  We were tasked with writing a piece that explored the idea of “something as friends.”  I thought this might be a good opportunity to practice the sonnet form again and wrote this response about my dad.  He died nearly six years ago.  I thought that perhaps the restraint of the form might help distance from the grief.  It did, and it didn’t.

 

“Ghosts as friends”

Nothing remains of what you used to be.
Your clothes recycled ashes cast away.
The house is sold with no estate for me.
Not that I mind, I’m never one to stay;
You taught me that habit from early on
Packing and moving from home to abode
Seas we crossed, lands traversed and forgotten
all part of the fun you promised and told
a great adventure awaits us beyond
you cannot spend your life looking back dear
you will thank me once you have reached the end
You cannot focus on the things you fear.
I now can thank you for my wander lust.
Travel with me still, only as a ghost

 

Your Turn! 

Lines: 14
Rhyme: abab cdcd efef gg
Rhythm: Iambic Pentameter [“ba-dum, ba-dum, ba-dum, ba-dum, ba-dum”]